I really like the tone used in this audition and the overall clarity, but I feel like your inflection comes loose in a few places and it becomes obvious that you're projecting a voice. On the final line- there's a notable shift in quality as if you've moved away from the mic: instead try turning down the gain and maintaining your normal acting distance as it creates a less noticeable shift in volume.
Thank you for the feedback! I actually saw a previous comment mentioning the distance issue, and made sure to stay the same distance, but I guess I turned the gain down too low. Was there any particular line that stood out as me acting instead of being the character for me trying to re-record this? Or just parts of lines? But thanks for getting back to me so fast, I do appreciate the feedback, I’ll try another take if that’s alright with you?
"photographic proof" was probably the worst offender. When it comes to gain- you want to keep it consistent and just project more: it's easier to tone your audio down than try and scale it up.