I am no expert at all, but you have alot of noise in the background, maybe try finding another spot in your home to record, with less noise? Again, no expert, just a suggestion.
Hey man, you got a good voice, but in my opinion some things need to be worked on. Like the other guy said, background noise is killing it. You and I have the same mic, if you wanna PM me we can talk about how to get the most out of your mic. :)