Its a close match, but its missing something specific. I can hear that he's jaded, clearly not all that happy with what his job is, but Hey, he's getting through it, one cigarette at a time. If its alright, id like you to do another run at it, and go for something just a bit more like an ass. Yeah, you don't like your job, but so log as you're stuck here, you may as well have fun. And nothings more fun that ticking off your superiors just a little. I want to be able to hear that even though you're mocking them, you're getting kind of an immature kick out of it.
Hello! I did another submission that's a bit more emotive and assey than this one. Have a good one!