This is genuinely almost a 1:1, I'm seriously impressed. Only thing I'd say is that the yelling part should be a bit louder and sporadic.
Voice Actor
She's... certainly someone, just not very noticeable. You don't need to be super close to the official English dub, but do bring the same frantic and chaotic energy!
Reference:
KOBENI SCENES | Chainsaw Man (DUB)
"Since they can't get in and we can't get out, everybody here is gonna die. We'll slowly starve to death..." [She's quiet, shaky, and very scared here.]
"I wanted to go to college but I'm just going to my grave!" [Again, VERY shaky and scared. Also, a bit loud here.]
"Her ability is keeping us on the eight floor, right?! THAT JUST HAS TO BE WHY!" [VERY loud and scared, like SCREAMING.]
