I like your tone of voice, but Beam does sound a bit exasperated. He should also have that sort of gravelly voice, similar to how Inosuke from Demon Slayer talks. I do suggest analyzing the reference video to hear what I mean, because I'm not the best when it comes to explaining these sorts of things.
But you're doing a great job! I like the emotion you put into the last line!
Voice Actor
The man, the myth, the legend (and shark)! I would like this to be as close to the official English dub as you can possibly get. He should be loud and energetic, people!
Reference:
All BEAM (Shark Fiend) Scenes | Chainsaw Man: Reze Arc [4k DUB]
"Lord Chainsaw! What a glorious honor!"
"You're the best! The greatest! A righteous badass!"
"That smell... I know it! SHE'S THE BOMB DEVIL! [He's frantic here, running away with Denji as Reze chases after them. Be sure to add a bit of PIZZAZ here, you feel?]
