I really love the motivation you have for this project, I would love to help anyway I can! I know my submission needs much improvement, but I would really appreciate any kind of feedback/criticisms you have on my piece to help me improve as a better Voice Actor (since this is a dream job of mine I'm FINALLY putting into motion!) Thank you for the audition and have a wonderful day :)
There might be an echo and/or some kind of distortion - it is kinda hard to tell. What kind of mic are you using to record w/and what do you have the gain set at ? There are a lot of clicks (in case you did not know, that sound is caused by saliva), but I think you can prolly identify them after the little exercise I gave you. Try eating slices of a granny smith apple before and as needed during recording and see if that helps. "Presently" was weirdly pronounced. Your reading itself is not bad at all, but it will get better w/practice, which this project will provide you.