Pitch is once again the downfall of another otherwise good audition, as it is too high for this character; even with the more throaty voice you have going on here. Delivery is strange because the speed is a little fast at the start but evens out, and the emotional peaks are reached but need a bit more power behind them to really make them stand out. Tone sounds a little too confident for the character, as it almost sounds like he's underestimating or looking down on the dangers beyond. This is another issue that can be fixed, but the issue with your pitch may be something you'll just have to earn through time. Also, if you're going to do the demonic speech, try to be a little more clear with your ramble as it does come in a little fast.