Pitch needs to be lower here, as it not only sounds too young but doesn't really sell the character's raspy voice. Delivery is fair, you have the poetic rhythm behind the Leper's voice as well as his calm demeanor but there is a lacking gusto to the second line's last half that could be stronger. Tone is grave, and somber which does match the character's intent throughout the lines. However, it is the pitch that works against you here, as it makes the tone come off as a little out of the character's age.
