Pitch is fine for this one, sounds more like a traditional lady with a lower tone which is good. Delivery is inconsistent here, as your emoting and pacing is quite good for the first and second line portions yet the final ones have strange inflections on your part. Tone is also strange for this one. You have the upbeat attitude down, and the smug nature of the character, however I don't hear the shift to that serious edge in the last lines. Also, if you're going to shout try to equalize your mic so it doesn't blow out like in the end of the first line.
I definitely see what you mean with the inflection/tone issues with the last part, I think I was being too indecisive with how I wanted to deliver it. Would it be alright with you if I tried re-recording those last couple of lines? I'm pretty inexperienced with shout lines so I'll look into what I can do to maintain the sound with them, thanks for the feedback!
If you're going to re-record it, you may as well attempt to do the whole audition over. I'll judge it accordingly, so please post the new one here whenever you're ready.
Thanks, is there anything in the earlier part (besides fixing the audio issue) that you'd like to hear differently?
