Your voice fits this one quite well, as the pitch is spot on with the character's. Delivery has a good amount of emoting, but it's unfortunately not enough to convey the true zeal of this character. Tone is almost there, you have the intent and prideful demeanor with you, but you need less restraint. This is a warrior of faith, a zealous ex-knight that should be proclaiming his statements and you're only halfway there with your current delivery.
Thanks for the comment! Would it be okay if I give you one more attempt?
Of course, but remember that you only get one retry. Please post the retry whenever you're ready.