Your voice fits perfectly with the character. However, there isn't enough emotions at the final sentence, she just learned the death of his/her beloved, she's in tears, fists tights, she is so mad that her nails are nearly going through her skin. Imagine Akane Owari when she found Nekomaru dead. But of course in that case, sadness is more powerful than anger.
Oo okay! I’ll try again! Thanks for the feedback!