Hi Moniek

Thank you so much for submitting for Zypher! Yours was the very first audition for this role, and you immediately set a high bar. The raw emotion in your opening line “As long as I draw breath…” was incredible. That subtle, underlying strain in your voice perfectly captures someone physically and mentally fighting off an internal parasite while holding her ground.

You have immense potential for this role, and we'd love to request a quick callback/re-take with a few specific direction notes to see if we can lock this in:

Tactical Commands vs. Aggression (“Hold the line!”):

Current Take: Leans heavily into a furious, guttural growl.

Adjustment: Aim for a grounded, battle-tested squad leader commanding respect through pure willpower rather than losing control. Keep that intensity, but tilt it toward steady authority over raw aggression.

Emotional Blend on the Lilith Line (“You sacrificed yourself to save me…”):

Adjustment: Try blending the emotional depth and slower pacing of your second variation with the raw resolve of your first as long as i draw breath lineBanter & Big Sister Energy (“Not bad. Keep that up and I might let you drive next time.”):

Adjustment: Give this one a bit more vocal depth and a light touch of genuine, positive laughter. It’s a moment where she’s cheering a teammate on, so leaning into that warm, supportive "big sister" energy will make the banter land really well.

Natural Delivery:

Just keep doing what comes naturally to your voice like you did in those opening seconds that organic delivery is where the magic is.

I really appreciate the energy and care you put into understanding Zypher's story. Looking forward to hearing your next pass if you're open to giving it another go!