Just some general advice for all of your auditions I've heard so far. Make sure you carefully read exactly what the text of the script says. I noticed you often omit words or substitute different words in. Also, on this audition in particular, you included three characters that are not Kalimat. For technical reasons, you should try not to do that in the future.
Yes, I understand I made a lot of errors and I should of fixed them in the single take I did. I should of did another take but I was pressed for time. And that was all my fault since I had difficulty getting the confidence to do it.But yes, I should of did another take and got the lines right.
As long as you learn from this, that's fine. I might not be a "professional" internet voice actor, but I'd like to help by sharing the knowledge I do have about what I look for in a good audition.