I think you need a bit more energy in your performance. It sounds to me like you're just reading the lines in your normal speaking voice. I want to give you constructive feedback, but this sounds a little too boring. Try listening to my audition for inspiration.
Hi, thanks for the feedback, after listening to your audition you are completely correct. Your audition is brilliant, the problem I have is the line reading should I learn them and then do the auditions?
My general advice is this: Before recording an audition, you should practice how you're going to perform the voice a few times, and do as much research as you can on the character or role. If any words are unfamiliar to you, look them up or ask the project creator about them, as they might be words invented for that story that don't exist outside of it (like "Alpake" and "Huacaya").
