Your pacing and pauses seemed good. Enunciate 'beauty' and 'emeralds'. Lots of clicks. For example, listen closely to "and a tear, a real tear trickled down his little shabby velvet nose", For the purpose of this project, you would need to edit out your breaths. Your intonation on "and watching it", "and kissed him on his velveteen nose", and "now" (immediately before "you shall be") were nice. "Real to this boy" should be "Real to the boy".
Oh, oops, I just noticed. You did not actually ask for feedback. Oh, well, you got it anyway.;)
No worries, I actually do appreciate the feedback, thank you! Great ear, I'll see if I can make the suggested fixes. :)
You are very welcome. If and when you do, please audition again. I think you have potential and that we might be able to use you on the cast.