You are have a habit of always ending on an upswing before a pause (like at the end of statements - that is not always appropriate to the context and the way you do it is not natural ("and out of it stepped a fairy" sounds kinda creepy, frankly). Go up and listen to my sample again. You also tend to have mouth noise around your pauses. These would need to be edited out for the purpose of this project. I have not had a chance to try it out myself, yet, but someone suggested to me yesterday that eating Granny Smith apples help stop clicks from happening. Btw, I noticed that you bid $120... you do know the reward for winning auditions themselves is $5, right ? And we all volunteer our voices on the show. However, the coaching is free (normally, professionals charge at least $50 an hour for it, so that adds value to participating in the project). I would just hate for you to be disappointed after how hard you have been working and trying to take my advice. I really do admire your determination and I am here to help others, even if they do not end up on the show.
Oh. strange, I didn't even change the bid, it must be set like that automatically.
Yeah, someone said that it is.