Narrators Needed for Children's Show on Radio Fairfax
nexilus for Narrator
The objective is not to sound like you are reading; you're supposed to be retelling a story. I expect you to edit your work.
Of what use was it to be loved and lose one's beauty and become Real if it all ended like this? And a tear, a real tear, trickled down his little shabby velvet nose and fell to the ground.
And then a strange thing happened. For where the tear had fallen a flower grew out of the ground, a mysterious flower, not at all like any that grew in the garden. It had slender green leaves the colour of emeralds, and in the centre of the leaves a blossom like a golden cup. It was so beautiful that the little Rabbit forgot to cry, and just lay there watching it. And presently the blossom opened, and out of it there stepped a fairy.
She was quite the loveliest fairy in the whole world. Her dress was of pearl and dew-drops, and there were flowers round her neck and in her hair, and her face was like the most perfect flower of all. And she came close to the little Rabbit and gathered him up in her arms and kissed him on his velveteen nose that was all damp from crying.
"Little Rabbit," she said, "don't you know who I am?
"The Rabbit looked up at her, and it seemed to him that he had seen her face before, but he couldn't think where.
"I am the nursery magic Fairy," she said. "I take care of all the playthings that the children have loved. When they are old and worn out and the children don't need them any more, then I come and take them away with me and turn them into Real."
"Wasn't I Real before?" asked the little Rabbit.
"You were Real to the Boy," the Fairy said, "because he loved you. Now you shall be Real to every one."
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Hello there! I would like to have some feedback regarding my read please. Thank you!
Great job !! Remarkably, you had no clicks at all !! Be careful not to lose your enunciation, for example, when you said the words 'become', 'dewdrops', and 'gathered'. There is a pop right after [...] and out of it, there stepped a fairy". "[...] seen her face before [...]" was a bit fast. There are other places where you speed up. Slow down and you will not need to take heavy breaths (those have to edited out, so it will save you time in the end). I am a little disappointed that you did not give the fairy a distinct voice, like you did w/the rabbit, at the end. Btw, his internal thought "Of what use was it to be loved [...]" should sound the same as when he speaks aloud. I think you would be a wonderful character actor and I hope you will accept my invitation to join our cast.
Thank you very much for your helpful feedback! I would be more than happy to accept your invitation!
Good, I am glad :). E-mail me at [email protected] and we will set about finding you your first story !