Narrators Needed for Children's Show on Radio Fairfax
golden for Narrator
The objective is not to sound like you are reading; you're supposed to be retelling a story. I expect you to edit your work.
Of what use was it to be loved and lose one's beauty and become Real if it all ended like this? And a tear, a real tear, trickled down his little shabby velvet nose and fell to the ground.
And then a strange thing happened. For where the tear had fallen a flower grew out of the ground, a mysterious flower, not at all like any that grew in the garden. It had slender green leaves the colour of emeralds, and in the centre of the leaves a blossom like a golden cup. It was so beautiful that the little Rabbit forgot to cry, and just lay there watching it. And presently the blossom opened, and out of it there stepped a fairy.
She was quite the loveliest fairy in the whole world. Her dress was of pearl and dew-drops, and there were flowers round her neck and in her hair, and her face was like the most perfect flower of all. And she came close to the little Rabbit and gathered him up in her arms and kissed him on his velveteen nose that was all damp from crying.
"Little Rabbit," she said, "don't you know who I am?
"The Rabbit looked up at her, and it seemed to him that he had seen her face before, but he couldn't think where.
"I am the nursery magic Fairy," she said. "I take care of all the playthings that the children have loved. When they are old and worn out and the children don't need them any more, then I come and take them away with me and turn them into Real."
"Wasn't I Real before?" asked the little Rabbit.
"You were Real to the Boy," the Fairy said, "because he loved you. Now you shall be Real to every one."
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It is highly distorted.
What exactly is distorted about this submission?
Weird, the whole thing was the first time I tried to listen to it.
Now that the distortion rectified itself, I can actually hear mouth noise thru out - that is the bubbling/clicking sound you can hear, for example, between 'a tear' and 'a real tear'. It seems to occur more often during your pauses. I still struggle w/that. The only way I have found to fix that is to drink water before and occasionally during recording. Also, you have several plosives, too. For instance, on the p in presently-- if you are already using a pop filter, try backing off the mic. I prolly sit 2" away from my mic at home and the ones in the studio work best craned above my head. If you do not have a pop filter you might want to look into it. Feel free to audition again. I am happy to help, if I am able to.
2' not 2"