I like what I hear! Although I feel like you're saying your lines a bit too fast and it ends up being complimented by a bit of a sloppy delivery.
This was me coming back to voice acting after nearly 4 years of a hiatus. The last 3 weeks most of my auditions have been just practice for me. Since I recorded this audition my microphone and vocal booth have both been upgraded and listening to it now I wouldn't say most of these lines the same way.