Honestly much better, and I love the attention to details on the last part. However, after our team took some time to decide, we unanimously agreed that jaydoessharp's interpretation is better albeit VERY SLIGHTLY. Both of you did a fantastic job however, I sincerely hope this does not discourage you in any way, in fact if you have any other roles you want to audition for for this project I would be more than happy to invite you in :)