This was very good! The only thing I'd say is maybe add a /little/ more enthusiasm towards the start, to match what you've put in the end. Your pacing was amazing as well!

Great job! Your voice has a recognizable value to it, I can easily picture you doing this reads for professional scripts. The start of the script felt slightly rushed to me (the words were said one after another almost like reading a script), but you quickly made your read stand out afterward which was impressive. Aside from that, make sure your articulation is always placed at the forefront of your performance. It was overall solid, but at a few points fell just a bit flat. This was a very solid take!