Id say the voice was pretty good! Just one thing though is that some parts did get a little fast

Very clean take! I like your articulation a lot, it added quite a bit to your performance. From here, I would recommend working on your energy! There definitely is already a healthy amount of uniqueness here, but it's missing the passion I would expect a sales-person to bring to the table when trying so hard to sell their product. Also, try not to change up your pacing too much, some parts you clearly went fast and it sounded impressive, but it felt just a bit out of place compared to the rest of your read. I really enjoyed this, great stuff!