Interesting take on the assignment! I say maybe try keeping a more consistent speed when speaking, sometimes when you changed the speed of your speech it felt forced.

Hey, I like what you're going for here! I would recommend spending more time on honing the clarity in your VO performances. I find it difficult to understand what you are saying the faster you speak throughout the script. When you slowed down, I was able to hear the strong and articulate performance you were putting forth! Try slowing down, add even more energy, and bring it all together for a passionate read. Good job!