Love your energy and style! My only thought is that is may be a little too spaced out in the beginning, every comma really heard. Editing your takes so words are a little closer together may help with this. I would buy it though!

That is some high-energy reading right there! Really enjoyed it. And about the comma breaks, I do agree it might be just a tad too long.

I loved this 😆 it gave me such vibes of the announcers/narrators on Cartoon Network, such a fun read. If I were to say anything it's probably what was already said about the spacing as far as the commas. But generally still enjoyable 😄

Ooh, this energy is fantastic! This is exactly what I have in mind when I see this script and imagine an ideal take: an entertaining read that is fun to listen to. The energy and passion can be felt 100%! From here, my recommendation is to make your read just a bit more approachable and natural. The salesman-voice is perfect, but adding a bit more of a smile (which could be felt in various points) will be a perfect cherry on top. Well done, truly! - Joe, CC TA