I really like your voice, I definitely get commercial vibes from it and like the parts where it fluctuated tone wise. If I were to give critique I think I'd have to say that (mostly in the first half) it sounded like you were reading off of a checklist and I think I personally would like if it was just a little bit faster too. 🙂

This was a great take! I would recommend working more on your breathing and projection first and foremost. Every little breath can be a hindrance when it comes to truly putting forth your best performance. Aside from that though, I liked your style here! I'm excited to hear you moving forward. - Joe, CC TA