Great clarity and consistency! It almost had a beat poet rhythm to it, and your voice was pleasant to listen too. It's evident that you took the time to understand what you were preforming. A few of the moments where the text was the most dense felt a little rushed, but it was nothing major and I certainly don't speak from a position of authority. Great job, and keep at it!

I'm impressed by your fast pace! Nice job staying as clear as you did. That said, don't feel that you HAVE to go fast with a salesman-type script like this. I feel that your energy and the genuine feeling was lost because you were focusing on simply going fast clearly. Also, your voice was a bit too "staccato," it felt like each word was jumpy and bumpy as opposed to smooth and continuous throughout. Try slowing it down a notch and really taking your time to SELL us this product. Great work all in all though, looking forward to your next performance!