The Marla Saga - fantasy/adventure Audiobook Series
TurfyBarley88 for Criston Fames
BOOK 1-3
The main antagonist of the first book, though he doesn’t reveal himself until near the end. He’s a giant monster that tends to eat children. He had planned to devour Marla and then tries to make her is apprentice. All of his text is typed in caps because of his large body makes him seem to have a loud voice. However, he is rather calculated and maniacal with how he talks. He becomes a good guy in the later books.
You do not need to talk loudly or with a booming voice, this is something that shall be edited.
“MARLA…SO YOU CAME? Splendid. Javis was right, I can smell that you are more than meets the eye. You’re very special, and I bet that you are oh so delicious.”
(almost annoyed) “Crying? That’s not going to help you.”
(flustered) “I-I’m not sure what you’re rambling about.”
“Eat her? that’d be a waste. How many times do you come across such a rare jewel? Even I wouldn’t dare play with those chances. No. I don’t want to eat her. I want her and what she has to offer.”
“If I can’t use your power, then yes, it would be a waste. But if I can’t use you, then what’s the point? You’re better off to me dead.”
“I don’t understand. What is going on? Stop crying! Answer my question and stop this foolish rambling!”
“I’m scared. What’s going to happen to me now? I am going to be in so much trouble for what I have done.”
So I actually really liked all of your new auditions (Criston, Derrel, & Coal). My one critique is that Coal might sound a little more mature/older than I'd hope, but your manner of speaking is pretty perfect for him. I'd do a few tweaks with line delivery for Criston, but that is something I cannot fault without direction or context, so don't worry about that one! Thank you once again for your auditions!