This was solid read! I liked the variation when you read the phone number. You broke that up very nicely. Also, the "see you there!" was great. Felt very natural to me. While I do agree that it felt a bit muted in energy, I wouldn't quite say it sounded close to monotone, so I think while it could certainly have used more energy, it wasn't terrible on that front. Just a slight tune up. My only other critique is that the way you hit "with a free lunch" sounded a bit like an afterthought to me, and I think it's partly because "with a free lunch" had the same high-to-low rhythm as "dance party" right before it, so you may want to pay attention to that in the future.

I like the energy, but I also think there could be a little more oomph to it. I agree with ashercrane that the "with a free lunch" kind of stuck out as awkward.