Love the overarticulation present! I could tell this was your biggest priority in the read, as it should be. From here, my main feedback for you is to practice adding a more exciting tone to your voice. Right now, I feel that there is only a thin layer of passion in your voice, while the entire read should be bustling with high energy. You reached this level around 1:00 into the script, but I would love to hear it even more overall. Well done!