Hey Jei, you sound great! You have a good amount of energy in the reading. I will say you may want to pace yourself a bit more though, it seemed like you might have been rushing to speak.

The pace you set was smooth and consistent, but I would recommend taking it a step back by slowing it down a considerable margin. Your words were blurring together too much because you were trying to go really fast, and I think your read will be much more clear if you were to slow it down even a little. After working on that, bring up your energy levels! Remember to use your whole body; we are doing voice-over, but we are not only using our voice to give fantastic performances. Good stuff though, I can't wait to see you improve!