Great energy! You really nailed the hype of it. That said, I saw your comment in Discord about being out of breath, and I think that vibes with what I wanted to say after listening: you can slow down! Speaking so fast, you lose a lot of clarity, so slowing down and taking a moment to breathe will both help you with feeling great after and improving your overall clarity and enunciation! :)

Because this is a salesman-type script, it IS tempting to go really fast! Considering how fast you were going, I am impressed. That said, any client will ALWAYS prefer a slow and steady take that focuses on clarity as opposed to treating it like a race. I know it's fun to challenge yourself, but it's better to keep your auditions and recordings to clear, smooth, and controlled performances. This will also help so much with breathing. Take it one step at a time and work on that! Looking forward to hearing your performance for the next homework.