Loved the confidence in the delivery! Projection could be a little louder & breath support needs some practice but I honestly think you have potential to use something like this in commercial work. Nicely done!

This was so full of character! Fantastic job. My main critique for you is your breathing. Remember to take big breaths in-between sentences while not letting it bleed into your recording, but even aside from that, try not to let yourself take multiple shallow breaths in a row. One powerful breath will always serve you so much better. Aside from that, I do think you could raise your energy just a bit through projecting more, but you're very close as you are, so that isn't a huge critique of mine. Great stuff, can't wait to hear more!