I love the energy and enthusiasm you gave this, especially about the pocket pencil sharpener. I want one! I really do! Anyway, I don't feel super qualified to critique anything, but I just wanted to let you know I really enjoyed your take.

Hey Pao! First of all, if you're auditioning and doing voice-over, you ARE a voice actor! You're past the aspiring stage, be confident in that. But yes, I really like the energy and style you brought to this read! The performance was fun to listen to. That said, I think you could bring a lot more energy to the energy you've already brought. If you're giving 75%, give an additional 75%, and if you need to hold back AFTER, then you can do so. Sometimes the energy rose, and sometimes it fell. Give us your all! Overall, keep honing in on your articulation and breathing, and you'll be set. Nicely done, Pao!