I like the energy that you put in here! It sounds pretty good overall in my opinion. Perhaps you went a little too loud and spoke quite fast in some parts, so you might want to be more aware of that sometimes. :)

Hey Roderick! Okay, the energy here was great, but it almost felt...incomplete. It felt like you were pushing to give us that energetic voice, but the rest of your body wasn't into it. You almost sounded a little bored at times. If you add in a big smile, use your entire body to sell your voice, and give us even more energy, it will come across a lot more genuine. Also, focus more on your articulation. It's totally okay to slow down and adjust your pace as necessary to make sure you're saying every word clearly. Aside from that, I liked the character that you were bringing to life! Apply these things, in addition to continuing to practice your breathing to prevent shallow breaths, and you'll be on the right track. Great job.