Hi Germane (hopefully I didn't butcher your name spelling..), From the sounds of it, it doesn't seem like your lip is injured at all! In the 2nd and 3rd paragraph, maybe pause/or breathe when there's comas? You don't want to make it seem like you're running out of breath. Other than that, you have a crisp voice!

Your voice is very smooth! I can easily see you fitting a variety of characters. That said, my advice for you is to slow down your performance. Whenever you DID speak slower, the clarity was much clearer. Most of the read, however, felt rushed with the words blurring together more than they should have. After you've improved your clarify with a slower pace, focus on bringing more energy, and taking bigger breaths as opposed to shallow ones! This was a good read, just keep practicing and you'll get better and better.