Have to appreciate your energy in this one, sounds pretty good. The only criticism I would make is that the speed is a little fast in places that could affect clarity of hearing.

Hey Michael! My main critique is your speed. Even though the read is a salesman-type script, focus on your articulation over the fast pace. The type of energy you brought was fun, but I felt you could still project more from your gut to fill up that "empty space." That said, the professional and posh voice you provided was very unique and fun to listen to! Great job being creative. Keep practicing your breathing exercises so that you don't take as many shallow breaths, focus on that articulation, and the read will be even better. Nice job!