I love the enthusiasm in this take! Really made me laugh a few times! I think you handled your breathing well, even with asthma!

I truly do love this one! Makes me wish I did add character flare into it. You did a great job, I love the squeakiness of your voice.

Hi Birdie!! You brought a lot of character and energy to the read, which is very appreciated. However, be sure to prioritize articulation over the character voice. Sometimes it felt so squeeky that I couldn't quite understand what you were saying at times. Also, the speed would increase variably, meaning that the consistency of your read would suffer just a bit whenever it happened. Focus on keeping a steady pace while focusing more on articulation over the character voice. Overall though, I loved the energy and personality you brought to this read! Keep it up!!

One more thought I had was to also prioritize your breathing. Obviously reads like this take a LOT out of anyone, but there were a lot of shallow breaths taken throughout, especially near the end. Take BIG breaths and use that power to get through your sentences more smoothly. Practice those exercises!