Hi Edmund! I really liked the energy you put into this audition and you definitely kept me engaged through the whole thing. The only thing I would say is the breaths between paragraphs are a little too loud. Other than that, you did great

i like this alot. some bits did sound like you were about to bust out a rap haha. comes out natrual though.

Great energy! The flow was super interesting and unique from any of the reads I've heard so far. Your articulation and projection are SO close to being perfect, but if this wasn't one take all the way through, this would be an easy problem to fix. Practice your breathing more. I'm reading some of the other comments, and it's totally fine that your breath intakes were "loud" in-between sentences (since this can easily be removed in post), but don't let your breaths bleed into your read. Sometimes you were taking a breath and then immediately jumping into reading your next line, which gave off an exasperated tone to your voice. Otherwise, this read was so well done. Nice work!