The assignment encouraged me to give feedback, so… I’m just gonna say this. I LOVE the clarity. The read felt like you genuinely believed what you were saying. However, While clear and enunciated throughout… I just didn’t feel the energy of a salesman or someone speaking to a crowded gym. If you could up the intensity…even just a little, picture a used car ad or a snake oil salesman in a western. You are trying to Sell a crowd on BS junk by your word alone. Embrace that angle, and embrace a few flubs here and there, I could be wrong. But, it feels a little monotone at the beginning. Negatives aside… a great take overall despite my many pics of nit.

The articulation in this read is top-notch! That is one of the most important parts of any kind of VO as Brendan mentioned, so I am very impressed with how you were able to consistently keep that clarify in your voice. What you should work on next for reads like this is focusing on your projection. The speed is great and the articulation is excellent, but the energy makes the read fall below what I feel it could be with just a little bit more projection. A sales pitch needs both speed-infused clarity AND energy, so if you were to raise that energy level, this would be a flawless read in my opinion!