RWBY: REMNANTS [Fanmade Illustrated Video Series]
Bill Callas for Headmaster Ozpin
The enigmatic Headmaster of Beacon Academy.
He has a measured, sagelike voice, and sounds like he has seen and done everything. He speaks with authority and firm conclusion. He has the bearings of a wise old man or mentor. Like a stranger met upon a crossroads, an old man passing by, offering advice.
Does not have to sound like the show, but should exhibit these traits. Voice can be deeper or of equal tone to the original.
[Bargaining with Blake, after having caught her trying to enter Vale from beyond the city. He sounds measured, careful, but also considerate towards Blake's choice and safety.]
"Miss Belladonna, I offer you a choice. You can return the way you came, no questions asked, back to the battlefield you escaped from… or you can take refuge here. Become a Huntress. Fight for Vale. Just know... that if you accept, your former allies will now be your enemies."
[Speaking to General Ironwood privately regarding a certain incident long ago. He sounds serious, with a hint of regret.]
"I would advise caution, General. Summer Rose was not the only Hunter to die on that tragic day. Many good souls were lost, from my side… and yours. I suggest a more subtle approach this time. Only strike when we are absolutely certain of it."
[Interacting with Oscar. Relaxed, lighthearted and polite. He should sound like he takes quite a liking to Oscar and values what he says.]
"Ah, there you are, Oscar. No, I don't need anything, thank you."
[Oscar talks about work that he needs to do.]
"Hm... why don't you take the rest of day off? You've yet to fully tour Vale since you arrived, it would be a shameful opportunity to waste on a day as nice as this, yes?" *chuckles*
Good improvement! I think you can work with this, though listening to it, perhaps your quality of voice sounds it would be more fitting for a younger role than Ozpin. There are also certain parts in the performance (namely the second line) where I am able to perceive that you are perhaps deliberately changing your tone as you go, rather than organically. It's subtle, but it's sort of in the manner that you've placed more stress on different words in and the irregular rhythm you say them in a way that doesn't really flow in a natural spoken way. All in all though, I think your performance has improved and I can note it down. You're getting along with placing more emphasis and contrast in your performance, so it's now a matter of weaving it in an organic, spoken way.
It's abit of a pain to get in working a organic flow sometimes but I can definitely understand why. And thank you again for the Feedback! With the second line I wanted to try and go with Ozpin having a flashback with the "many good souls were lost" like he had just seen the aftermath of the Carnage.