Painting for No-One Narration
Piper1 for The Narrator
How do I describe a narrator? Well, uhh, he or she narrates the story. Jokes aside, I'm looking for a narrator that can really set the mood for a horror story, one that can captivate anyone's interest with a voice that's inviting yet intimidating.
[The opening line. A great chance to start the story off right.]
A cold night breeze whistled into the abandoned storage garage, harmonizing perfectly with the droning taps of leaking water from the ceiling.
[You are agreeing with The Artist in a similar, devilish tone.]
The painting was indeed magnificent. All the colors used on it blended together flawlessly, making the astonishing attention to detail stand out even more.
[A moment where tension is absolutely shattered. Your tone, speed, and volume should reflect that.]
The artist jumped in front of the paralyzed man out of nowhere, causing him to shriek from not only her sudden appearance, but also her ghoulish looks.
You do a great job adding character to the narrator. You made him sound like he enjoys telling the story, like a dad who's more than willing to scare the crap out of his kids for fun. I especially like how you slowed down and raised your voice at the end of the third line.