[CLOSED] Fallout: New Vegas Redesigned
themigratingcoconut for The Crucified Slave (This is a paid role $)
Payment: $30 for the chosen audition for the crucified slave
(The audition is the final version. No additional lines are needed)
Brackets represents a pause.
Preference:
I’d prefer if the character is older, around 55-60 years old but I have now removed the age requirement.
You don't have to follow the script verbatim. Do what feels most natural to you. I basically wrote brackets to indicate pauses as too many pauses or too much blank space between words confuses the game engine and its ability to lipsync.
*****Brackets represents a pause but you don't have to follow the script verbatim*******
Preference:
I’d prefer if the character is older, around 55-60 years old but I have now removed the age
requirement.
(The Courier will walk towards the Fort and a crucified man will speak to him or her)
Line 1: (in severe pain) (Should sound weak, tired, hungry, thirsty, in extreme pain)
(should sound weak but loud enough I can hear it, like someone drowning in water, yelling for help)
[Please!….Come here. Please..I beg you….]
(The courier walks towards the crucified man)
[I…I..don’t have much time left.](snifels) (runny nose) [I know…(winces)…I know I’m going to die here (swallows)]
[.I...I want you....to deliver something for me] (snifels)
(verge of tears)(weakly)
[My daughter….we….we… never abandoned her] (Grief)
(tears through eyes)
[She ..she needs to know...She…she..doesn't know.] (Grief)
(snifels) (cries lightly) [They killed my wife] (tears) (crying lightly) (COMPOSURE BREAK)
[Her body is here….. near the Bramin (Braw-men) pen] (Crying through words)
[This is where they keep the dead] (snifels) (Crying through words)
[She had a wooden necklace. The Legion didn’t take it ] (Crying through words)
[Please.]
(less crying but remnants remain, sniffling, runny nose) [Give this …give this necklace..to my daughter. She lives in Aerotech….She’ll know who it’s from]
[Tell her…..tell her that we love her very much]<=========this line has to move people
(weakly)
[Thank you…]<=====Grateful and crying
(weakly)
[Her name is Sarah]<=====Sadness when he mentions her name
Ok, this has been the most difficult to evaluate as everyone is extremely strong. I really like the voice and tone of the character that you have. So a couple things. First, I’m removing the word “TRAVELER”. I think removing the word “TRAVELER” makes the sentences more smooth. Could you redo these two lines where the word “traveler” is removed? (should sound weak but loud enough I can hear it, like someone drowning in water, yelling for help) [Please!….Come here] (weakly) [Thank you…] Ok, now. I’d like a redo of the four most important lines in this script. They are the following. This is a man with a lot of regret. His first regret is the fact that he never got to say what he wanted to say to his daughter and he knows that he probably never will. It’s a regret..a failure in his life. The second situation which causes him grief is what happened to his wife. That being said, could you redo these 4 lines given that information above? He needs to be on the verge of tears on all four lines and the listener must feel a sense of pain…a sense of regret…. [My daughter….we….we… never abandoned her] [She ..needs to know...She doesn't know.] [They killed my wife] (tears) (crying lightly) [Tell her…..tell her that we love her very much]
I'll redo my recording tonight when I get off work.
Sure thing. So the script is much more detailed now. Some things have changed. I've also provided an audition below which shows the intonation and pacing I'm looking for.
Gotcha. I had a bit of an unexpected issue pop up today with my aunt so I had to help her during my recording time so I'm working on it now.