Tauchu Universe
joshedev for Ozzo (The Friend)
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Ozzo is an incredibly compassionate bagbean. He is afraid of change, meeting new people, the dark, hurting the feelings of his friends, and pretty much anything that moves. He was never sheltered, and he wouldn't describe himself as a wimp, he just loves everything and worries about doing the wrong thing. He tends to be rather quiet and keeps to himself, but when he talks he always speaks the truth.
Ozzo is one of the primary characters of the overall story, and as such will be appearing in multiple shorts with between one and fifteen voice lines each. Payout is of course flexible and can be arranged on a per-video basis (or voluntarily.)
Ozzo is a bagbean, an original species developed by griffsnuff on deviantart. https://deviantart.com/bagbeans
(Sorrow) I... I didn't mean to. It was an honest mistake, really..
(Enthusiastic, wary) Oh, oh! That sounds like a good idea, but... but do you think they'd like me? Or my food? Oh I hope they would.
(Confused) The onions, they're everywhere! Oh, oh god! I need to organize these better.
Thanks for your audition! I do admire the attempt and overall you did do a good job of conveying emotion. However, I feel one area where you can improve is particularly in your pitch modularity. Although the slight wobble works for when he's anxious, when you're talking more casually or with lots of consonants, the exaggerated pitch dynamics/wobbling you've voiced here make it sound a little bit like it's meant to be a mock or a parody (particularly on "that sounds like a good idea"). I'd suggest trying to tone it down a little bit, even if that means being a bit more monotonous, and using rythm and your breath as the main means of conveying the emotion. This may sound rather vague, but I simply just mean focusing less on pitch and wobble of your voice, and more on how much breath you put into it, and the manner in which you speak. Keep practicing!
Oh, thanks for the detailed feedback, I appreciate it! The tips about pitch modularity are really helpful to know and I'll definitely keep that aspect more in mind for the future. Thank you!