Sorry if this sounds mean, but I'm not exactly sure why you auditioned for the first year pure? I might have encouraged you before, but I think I was expecting something gentler for the voice acting. Your voice isn't exactly the sweet, innocent, and childish voice you'd imagine when thinking of a first year pure character. It's quite levelled and mature, I mean it could be used as a twist in character design, but it's not expected if you were to look at the canon characters and the role in general. Your voice acting was very fast spoken and didn't have any of the emotions we were looking for. Slow down and take the time to voice act each line carefully. You're already pretty good at reading lines without stumbling or having issues, but I'll write each line to show you what emotions each line was supposed to convey so you can learn from it. Honestly, I'd say to go see Chiru's audition or just study anime voices for more help. >> "I'm Tanaka Koharu, a first year student at Ramuna High. I enjoy sweets, snacks, and just about any junkie food I can get my hands on!" (Normal) This line shows that this is the test character's normal type of voice. She is excited about talking about her junk food and that is her normal state of emotion on a typical line. There's an exclamation mark to show how this line was supposed to be read. You said the line. . . . But that's all you did. You quite literally said the line and listed off her favourite food. There was no excitement coming from this line. >> "Yeah, I'm all set! So we're going to a cake shop? I want to buy a whole cake, hehe!" (Happy) The first sentence shows that Koharu has gotten ready and is talking to someone who was waiting for her. The previous line already showed how enthusiastic she is about her junk food, especially sweets and snacks so this line should have been excited and happy. This line is linked with the third year's short voice acting happy line: "Did you pack your bags? Let's go then! I heard there's a new cake shop that opened today~ (Happy)" >> "Even if she's really cute, I don't want to watch two hour marathons of Tama-chan!! I want to watch EnlightEn's new live show!" (Anxious) There's uh, two exclamation marks to symbolise how heightened her emotions are. I'm not exactly sure how to explain this to you. Let's start off with what the emotion anxious means: anx·ious ˈaNG(k)SHəs adjective 1. experiencing worry, unease, or nervousness, typically about an imminent event or something with an uncertain outcome. "she was extremely anxious about her exams" synonyms: worried, concerned, uneasy, apprehensive, fearful, perturbed, troubled, bothered, disturbed, distressed, disquieted, fretful, agitated, nervous, edgy, antsy, unquiet, on edge, tense, overwrought, worked up, keyed up, jumpy, worried sick, with one's stomach in knots, with one's heart in one's mouth; More 2. wanting something very much, typically with a feeling of unease. "the company was anxious to avoid any trouble" synonyms: eager, keen, desirous, impatient "she was anxious for news" The emotion she's feeling right now is that she's wanting to watch EnlightEn's new live show, like she said in the second sentence. However, someone (Miyu) is trying to make her watch two hour marathons of Tama-chan (Miyu's cat) and she doesn't want to. Like she stated in the first sentence. Koharu is very anxious and wants to avoid a situation where she is unable to watch something that just came out and is being pressured into watching a cat video for two hours. Your line did not portray this at all. This line is linked with the second year's short voice acting happy line: Tama-chan is so cute! Do you want to see this video I took yesterday? Isn't she adorable? (Happy) >> "We got real fanmail!? Oh my god, what is it? Is it a letter? Did we get chocolates? I want to see! But is it for me...? C-could you check for me please?" (Excited/Wary) Your "Oh my god, what is it?" was the only distinct emotion here. Even your "C-could you check for me please?" fell flat in the mere fact you were rushing to get your lines all out within eight seconds really destroyed the emotion of any of the lines you were saying. "But is it for me...?" Periods mean a full stop, and if there's three periods it's usually because of the speaker being sad or being hesitant, and you were supposed to portray that. Timing is very important in this line because Koharu has low self confidence which is implied by asking another person to check the fanmail for her before she gets too excited for them. Your voice did not rise or lower and your excited and wary emotions were just. . . Very flat with no variation much like most of your voice acting. >> "I'm really glad that we can speak together like this. I really appreciate that we're friends, I feared that we would drift apart like everyone else... But I didn't have to worry about that did I?" (Heartfelt) The same as above. This was not heartfelt in the slightest because of how rushed it was, and it was the same length with eight seconds being the time it took you to say that line. It's better to imagine this scene to be as though Koharu express hering true, honest emotions to the dear friend she's having a heart to heart discussion with. >> "I'm not good at being a school idol! I don't know what to do! I don't want to leave Ai♥doru, but I don't want to bring you all down! Waaaah!" (Miserable) Koharu is obviously distressed and miserable, this would be very emotional for her because the line conveys feeling lost and conflicted. She doesn't want to leave, but she's also not very good at being an idol in the first place. There should have been a much more upset tone than what you used. The "Waaah!" line didn't help how unemotional this line was portrayed. >> "I thought I could put up with this and that you'd understand that you've been hurting me, but you seriously don't know what you've done, do you!?" (Seething) Your seething line did not bring any of the emotional intensity this line had the potential for. I'm seriously not sure what else to say except that you should try practicing reading novels out loud with strong, intense emotions. You are good at reading out loud, but not so much in voice acting. My review of your second year cool talked about the power of your singing: "Your voice is really pretty (!) and soft, but it's a bit weak for a second year cool. I had chosen Strawberry Trapper as the recommended song choice because I checked out your previous auditions on CCC and I thought it would be able to bring a much more stronger voice from you. Maybe you could practice on projecting your voice? I don't think you'd have the same issue with being too soft while voice acting because it's something you have to act out." I have a really terrible memory, but did you audition for the first year pure because of your voice type being more complimented by songs you would be able to sing softly? All of the songs you picked were songs you would be able to sing softly- but remember why I suggested Strawberry Trapper for your second year cool audition? I was trying to see how you would be able to deal with difficult songs that required much more power than you usually sing. Pures, while they do have a pretty gentle voice most of the time, also have a lot of songs that require them to be much more blunt and have more power in their somewhat thin voices. (For µ's at least, I'm still not all that familiar with Aqours' singing voices.) And as I said before: Your voice IS very pretty and soft, but it's not exactly a voice we are able to utilise properly for idol-music (especially songs that would not compliment your voice) and voice-acting heavy project like this. Not sure what more I can say. I asked for you to audition again in hopes to hear how you'd voice act and if it had more power than your singing voice, and it does- but only because you were just reading them out with little to no acting emotion. Thank you for your audition and your enthusiastic dedication to this project, shinozakeh, but I think your voice acting really, really needs work.

Ahh! Your voice is so pretty! It's soft and gentle! I loved it!