This is pretty good, their are two comments I want to make though. first off the pronunciation of Miya is (Mee-yah) basically I makes they ee sound. My other comment is tone, when running you lines some of them kind of seem to come off as condescending I don't know if that was the intention. However it feels jarring in that respect, for the first line she's mostly being a bit tsundere in the second line its more formal and the third lines is well resolute like I said. I say keep that stuff in mind if you want to try again.