This is pretty awesome for a first audition! Your diction is wonderful and the sound came through very consistently and clearly. This would be great if I were looking for someone to voiceover a commercial. For the parts where you use your "normal" voice, I dare say it's close to a professional level, like something you'd hear on the radio. However, your voice tends to lack energy and inflection at some points and especially with a role like this, needs more personality. Also, when you try to use a deeper range, it sounds slightly forced to me. Hope this advice helps and I wish you the best of luck in your future endeavors! : )