I like this; nice work! I'm going to hijack your audition to add context for that first line (which you did great without), because I honestly did not remember what it was from, at first: The guards show up AFTER she has already dealt with an assassination attempt on the king (though they were presumably just outside the door). They say "What--?" and she is understandably pissed at them.
Oh, thank you!! I can try it again, if you'd like!
Up to you! If you want to do it different, now that you have context on it, then by all means.