jam-ens? Maybe read the whole line through before you go to record. I can hear that your hearts in the character though which is good. If you put an effort in, it will come across and you have, but it's your slight errors in pronunciation and realistic tone that let you down. This probably isn't your fault either, but just the idiolect that you were born with. Try and practice reading things allowed and check pronounciation of words via google translate (which has a speak allowed feature) or another similar program. This is probably the best advice I can give and if I seem like I'm being negative, I'm not, I'm just trying to be critical and give feedback that you can use, rather than lying to you and saying 'yeah, good job, you did really great!' and then you feel bad if you fail in the future. I hope this feedback helps in some way.