Your volume is really *really* low - for auditions, I usually noise remove and normalize up to a reasonable level, and I think that'd be a good call for you. As for notes, I really like your tone and attitude and tone - this voice is great for the character. However, your third line could use a lot more energy. Your interpretation (which I do like) is him being glad but maybe a little perplexed, and still analytical. In the scene, he's like jumping around, freaking out, pumping the air, etc - I think some of that really needs to come through. And my final note is that you aren't doing the lines as written. While the lines end up sounding good, that doesn't cut it in a fandub like this. So while I really like your tone, this audition hurts your chances because I'm going to need the person I cast to get the exact words and exact timing right, and you haven't demonstrated the ability to do the first (so the second doesn't matter).