I really liked the energy into your audition! One major thing I'd say is holding you back however is that your acting doesn't sound very realistic. Line 1 sounds like I'm being greeted by an AI rather than a human being; line 3 sounds a little forced with the grunts. If you audition for Hawes again, I would recommend trying to put yourself into Hawes' shoes. Try to "act" like you are greeting a real person in Line 1rather than just reading a greeting. For line 3, Hawes is focused way more on the theft than his own well being, so try to ignore the pain when recording. Thanks for your time and good job Tyr!